re enhancing the story.

After our talk with Jared and Dan during thursday and friday, we have discussed possible ways of making the sotry more entertaining to the audience, and due to our conversation i have decided to re write certain bits of the story. Also from our discussion we have another to very minor character to introduce, the cafe working guy and a little kid. so my task this weekend is to re write the bits of the story. We did start thumnailing for our previous version of the story and decided that something will need to change however its still looking good i think.